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Message de alex95om posté le 08-12-2013 à 15:18:28 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
Pouvez-vous m'aider s'il vous plaît?
Merci pour vos réponses.
Titre :Horrible murder in Paris.
The dead woman was found around 3 am, last night in the Seine.
The polise have identified the victim.
According by the witnesses, the murderer is a young man around twenty.
The woman was stabbed and raped.
A suspect was arrested this morning, he denied any involvement in the murder of the young woman.
According to the parents of the victim, she had no enemies so it remains to find out why she was killed.
The suspect confessed after several hours of interrogation, the killing in his car and throwing over a bridge.
But he gives no reason for his act. The doctors think that he is a psychopath .
The murderer will be judged next week for premeditated murder.
Dans le texte il fallait mettre ces différents critères : headlines, passif, mots de liaison, vocabulaire du crime.
Pouvez-vous me corriger ?
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Modifié par lucile83 le 08-12-2013 17:07
Message de alex95om posté le 08-12-2013 à 15:18:28 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
Pouvez-vous m'aider s'il vous plaît?
Merci pour vos réponses.
Titre :Horrible murder in Paris.
The dead woman was found around 3 am, last night in the Seine.
The polise have identified the victim.
According by the witnesses, the murderer is a young man around twenty.
The woman was stabbed and raped.
A suspect was arrested this morning, he denied any involvement in the murder of the young woman.
According to the parents of the victim, she had no enemies so it remains to find out why she was killed.
The suspect confessed after several hours of interrogation, the killing in his car and throwing over a bridge.
But he gives no reason for his act. The doctors think that he is a psychopath .
The murderer will be judged next week for premeditated murder.
Dans le texte il fallait mettre ces différents critères : headlines, passif, mots de liaison, vocabulaire du crime.
Pouvez-vous me corriger ?
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Modifié par lucile83 le 08-12-2013 17:07
Réponse: Création/article journal de sherry48, postée le 08-12-2013 à 23:29:44 (S | E)
Hello.
Here are some comments on what you have written.
Titre :Horrible murder in Paris.
The dead woman was found around 3 am, last night in the Seine. (You might not say last night for 3 am).
The polise have identified the victim.
According by
The woman was stabbed and raped.
A suspect was arrested this morning, he denied any involvement in the murder of the young woman.
According to the parents of the victim, she had no enemies so it remains to find out why she was killed.
The suspect confessed after several hours of interrogation, the killing ___ in his car and throwing ___ over a bridge.
But he gives no reason for his act. The doctors think that he is a psychopath. (Is it certain, or a theory?)
The murderer will be judged next week for premeditated murder. (It seems accused or charged for the verb and a different preposition would be better than judged for).
Sherry
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Modifié par sherry48 le 08-12-2013 23:30
Do you need to translate titre?
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