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Message de dz213 posté le 18-05-2019 à 17:29:34 (S | E | F)
Bonjour, je passe mon oral bientôt est-ce possible de me corriger mes fautes svp ? Merci de votre aide.
I'm going to talk about the notion of Power. First of all I would like to give a definition of this notion : the power is the ability to control people, it is an exerted or able-to-be- exerted force. It can be exerted by justice, gouvernement , THE media, new technologies,ect. To illustrate this notion, I'm going to talk about new technologies, and THE media. So how does THE media have influence on us through new technologies? First, we will see who controls the media and then we will see the growing of the media.
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The media is the most powerful entity on the Earth. I studied a poster proposed by the association "Reporters without Broders" for the World Press Freedom Day. The WPFD is a world association of newspapers. The catchphrase used to highlight the message of this group is “silence kills democraty ”. The document serves as an occasion to inform citizens of violations of press freedom and a reminder to inform in servral countries arround the world that publications are censored, fixed and closed down, while journalists, editors and publishers are haressed , attacked, detained and even murdered. However, private individuals are able to fabricate a false identity and create a virtual relationship. They are also able TO inflitrate other people's communication networks to get personal and private information. For instace, I studied an extract FROM a novel entitled “SouthCoastLizzie on Mumsnet” written by Jonathan Col. It deals with a narrator so desperate to have news of his ex-wife and daughter. So he invents avatar to communicate with her on Mumsnet. Little by little gains his confidence and obstain agreement to engage in more private corrsepondence by email. This extract shows that anyone who's ill-intentioned can control the media.
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The media can also have a big influence on us, particulary with new technologies. The media can control us, and control our review of news. Indeed, in “The ideal Suspect” written by Mack Thompson; It focuses on a murder case and especially on THE WAY THE media deals with it. We can see that media controls people on a murder case and accuses an innocent man. With this exemple, we can see the power of media ; In addition, with new technologies, the media can have our personal information and listen to our conversations. For exemple I studied a text entitled “The Fall of an Icon”. That deals with The News of The World who was closed down after a hacking scandal; that is to say that The News of The World journalsits illegally listened to the private conversations of victims of crimes. It shows that we have to be careful to what we say and poste on social media, Internet, ect.
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Modifié par dz213 le 18-05-2019 17:30
Message de dz213 posté le 18-05-2019 à 17:29:34 (S | E | F)
Bonjour, je passe mon oral bientôt est-ce possible de me corriger mes fautes svp ? Merci de votre aide.
I'm going to talk about the notion of Power. First of all I would like to give a definition of this notion : the power is the ability to control people, it is an exerted or able-to-be- exerted force. It can be exerted by justice, gouvernement , THE media, new technologies,ect. To illustrate this notion, I'm going to talk about new technologies, and THE media. So how does THE media have influence on us through new technologies? First, we will see who controls the media and then we will see the growing of the media.
I/
The media is the most powerful entity on the Earth. I studied a poster proposed by the association "Reporters without Broders" for the World Press Freedom Day. The WPFD is a world association of newspapers. The catchphrase used to highlight the message of this group is “silence kills democraty ”. The document serves as an occasion to inform citizens of violations of press freedom and a reminder to inform in servral countries arround the world that publications are censored, fixed and closed down, while journalists, editors and publishers are haressed , attacked, detained and even murdered. However, private individuals are able to fabricate a false identity and create a virtual relationship. They are also able TO inflitrate other people's communication networks to get personal and private information. For instace, I studied an extract FROM a novel entitled “SouthCoastLizzie on Mumsnet” written by Jonathan Col. It deals with a narrator so desperate to have news of his ex-wife and daughter. So he invents avatar to communicate with her on Mumsnet. Little by little gains his confidence and obstain agreement to engage in more private corrsepondence by email. This extract shows that anyone who's ill-intentioned can control the media.
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The media can also have a big influence on us, particulary with new technologies. The media can control us, and control our review of news. Indeed, in “The ideal Suspect” written by Mack Thompson; It focuses on a murder case and especially on THE WAY THE media deals with it. We can see that media controls people on a murder case and accuses an innocent man. With this exemple, we can see the power of media ; In addition, with new technologies, the media can have our personal information and listen to our conversations. For exemple I studied a text entitled “The Fall of an Icon”. That deals with The News of The World who was closed down after a hacking scandal; that is to say that The News of The World journalsits illegally listened to the private conversations of victims of crimes. It shows that we have to be careful to what we say and poste on social media, Internet, ect.
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Modifié par dz213 le 18-05-2019 17:30
Réponse : Oral/Power de here4u, postée le 18-05-2019 à 23:48:23 (S | E)
Hello!
I'm going to talk about the notion of Power. First of all I would like to give a definition of this notion : the power is the ability to control people, it is an exerted or able-to-be-exerted force. It can be exerted by justice, gouvernement , THE media, new technologies,ect. To illustrate this notion, I'm going to talk about new technologies, and THE media. So how does THE media have influence on us through new technologies? First, we will see who controls the media and then we will see the growing of the media.
I/
The media is = plural!)the most powerful entity on the Earth. I studied a poster proposed by the association "Reporters without Broders" for the World Press Freedom Day. The WPFD is a world association of newspapers. The catchphrase used to highlight the message of this group is “silence kills democraty ”. The document serves as an occasion to inform citizens of violations of press freedom and a reminder to inform in servral countries arround the world that publications are censored, fixed and closed down, while journalists, editors and publishers are haressed , attacked, detained and even murdered. However, private individuals are able to fabricate a false identity and create a virtual relationship. They are also able TO inflitrate other people's communication networks to get personal and private information. For instace, I studied an extract FROM a novel entitled “SouthCoastLizzie on Mumsnet” written by Jonathan Col. It deals with a narrator xxx xx so + VERY? desperate to have news of his ex-wife and daughter. So he invents avatar(plural or determiner) to communicate with her on Mumsnet. Little by little (manque le sujet) gains his confidence (whose?)and obstain agreement to engage in more private corrsepondence by email. This extract shows that anyone who's ill-intentioned can control the media.
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The media can also have a big influence on us, particulary with new technologies. The media can control us, and control our review of news. Indeed, in “The ideal Suspect” written by Mack Thompson; ??? la ponctuation est erratique ... Vos phrases n'en sont pas !) focuses on a murder case and especially on THE WAY THE media deals with it. We can see that XXX media controls people on a murder case and accuses an innocent man. With this exemple, we can see the power of XXX media ; In addition, with new technologies, the media can have our personal information and listen to our conversations. For exemple I studied a text entitled “The Fall of an Icon”. That deals with The News of The World who was closed down after a hacking scandal; that is to say that The News of The World journalsits illegally listened to the private conversations of victims of crimes. It shows that we have to be careful to what we say and poste on social media, XXX Internet, ect.
Was that your conclusion?
Réponse : Oral/Power de dz213, postée le 19-05-2019 à 13:29:11 (S | E)
Bonjour, merci beaucoup pour votre correction mais je n'ai pas bien compris les trois X en vert que veulent dire et les phrases soulignées telle que I'm going to talk about.
Réponse : Oral/Power de here4u, postée le 19-05-2019 à 22:44:42 (S | E)
Hello!
XX/ XXX= éléments manquants ; ce qui est souligné n'est pas une "erreur" mais est maladroit ou ne se dirait pas !
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