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Let's Suggest/ 48
Message de here4u posté le 14-10-2023 à 17:37:56 (S | E | F)
Hello, dear writers!

Another new topic for you to write about. I hope many will participate enthusiastically, and that you'll do it as well as ever...

You mustn't be afraid of making mistakes... We LOVE mistakes, because they give us an opportunity to explain and correct them!

Here is today's topic: "Can women both manage to have a career and be mothers?" (140 to 150 words.)

Voici le rappel des modalités de la première partie de l'exercice :
1. Je vous demande une EXPRESSION sur le sujet proposé à m’envoyer en mp dès que possible …
2. Très vite, cette première expression sera publiée sur le Forum, et CHACUN sera libre de « corriger » UNE FOIS ( en collant le texte et indiquant les erreurs EN BLEU - ou en majuscules si vous ne pouvez pas utiliser les couleurs- , et en soulignant ce qui vous semble maladroit et que vous voudriez changer, sans donner votre « correction » (forme correcte), à ce moment là, comme il se doit.) Si un autre membre a déjà indiqué des erreurs en bleu, VOUS DEVEZ repartir de cette correction et la confirmer ou la corriger... Un seul essai à la fois sera publié pour corriger… Vous pourrez ensuite donner vos suggestions de correction (en vert!)

IMPORTANT ! Pour me faciliter le transfert des corrections successives de vos travaux sur le site, pourriez vous m'indiquer par un "(" le mot ou segment de phrase qui devrai(en)t être modifié(s), s'il vous plaît ?
ie. (I'm repeating for years... ou (was not only to want something,... Pourquoi ? Simplement parce que le site ne "garde" pas les indications de couleurs ou de soulignement etc. dès que l'on copie... Donc, je prends vos travaux, je les corrige au fur et à mesure avec les codes "bleu" ou "souligné" ou "vert", mais au moment où je vous poste la correction, je perds tout mon travail... et dois tout refaire mot à mot en direct avec deux fenêtres ou même deux écrans pour un travail fastidieux de copie point par point! Merci de votre aide !

Les modalités complètes sont accessibles sur le lien suivant :
Lien internet

( Je vous les rappellerai au fur et à mesure de la progression du travail )
Cet exercice sera ce que vous en ferez ou ou **
Do your best, I trust You!
Correction en ligne le samedi 28 octobre 2023.
J'attends vos envois en mp et publierai le premier dès que possible.

MAY THE FORCE BE WITH YOU and with us!

Réponse : Let's Suggest/ 48 de here4u, postée le 19-10-2023 à 13:06:31 (S | E)
Hello dears,

Here is EXPRESSION N°1: please indicate possible mistakes and underline what is clumsy.

Beeing mother ? Working outside ? I will say that it depend on the women’ partner. If they help and are organized to manage and educate the children together with the other partner, then it may be possible. Of course, boys will say that the women have always educate children and that they must continue… but even for married couples, the things are not ever easy. The men are come back from work, they are tired (the women are not !) and they sit on the sofa or go to the garden , or to work on their moto, or even play on the computers or phones and wait. The woman do everything and is exhausted. The ados (overall girls) help a little, but the boys don’t … They have always something to do…
A woman can be a breadwinner, if she has no kid, or if she is a single mum, but in that condition, her life and her children’ life may be hell… Lack of money, and lack of time maybe terrible… 166 words

for your help!

Réponse : Let's Suggest/ 48 de amalia80, postée le 20-10-2023 à 13:09:12 (S | E)
Hello dears,

EXPRESSION N°1: suggestions for corrections.

Beeing (x) mother ? Working outside ? I ('ll say that it(depend) on the( women' partner) r. If (they help) and(are organised) x to manage and educate the children together with the other partner, then it may be possible. Of course, boys will say that (the) women have always(educate) children and that they must) continue (x)… but even for married couples,(the) things are not (ever) easy. The men ( are come back) from work, they are tired (the women are not !) and they sit on the sofa or go to the garden , or(to) work on their' moto) , or even play on the computers or phones and wait. The woman (do) everything and is exhausted The( ados) (overall ) ( girls) help a little, but the boys don’t … They have always something to do…
A woman can be a breadwinner, if she has no kid, or if she is a single mum, but in that condition, her life and her (children' life) may be hell… Lack of money, and lack of time (maybe) terrible… 166 words

Réponse : Let's Suggest/ 48 de amalia80, postée le 24-10-2023 à 08:19:07 (S | E)
Hello dears,

EXPRESSION N°1:

Beeing (a) mother ? Working outside ? I 'd say it depends) on the( woman's partner.) r. If ( he helps) and( organises himself) to manage and educate the children together with the other partner, then it may be possible. Of course, boys will say that women have always( brought up) children and that they ' should continue to do so()… but even for married couples, things are not ( always) easy. The men ( come home ) from work, they are tired (the women are not !) and they sit on the sofa or go to the garden , or work on their motorbike) , or even play on the computers or phones and wait. The woman ( does) everything and is exhausted The( teenagers,girls in general, ) help a little, but the boys don’t … They have always something to do…
A woman can be a breadwinner, if she has no kid, or if she is a single mum, but in that condition, her life and ' that of her children ) may be hell… Lack of money, and lack of time ( can be) terrible… 166 words

Réponse : Let's Suggest/ 48 de here4u, postée le 26-10-2023 à 22:40:48 (S | E)
Hello!

Je pense que le bleu précédent est vert... Grand merci!

Voici EXPRESSION N°2: please indicate possible mistakes and underline what looks clumsy...

Combine life as a mother with a professional career; many young women manage to do this successfully.
Of course, this requires organization and, when possible, the active participation of the partner who can help for a lot of things!
You can also give small tasks to your children.
We no longer live in the time of our grandmothers, and the use of numerous household appliances and robots of all kinds is a great time saver that can be devoted to personal or family leisure activities
Without making a habit of it, you also need to know how to ask for help when the load is too heavy. Why not ask the grandparents, who will often be happy to drive the children to the park or to various activities on Wednesdays?
It's also essential to maintain a balance between family and professional life, so that one doesn't take precedence over the other.
Finally, as a last piece of advice I'd say; try to set aside some time only for yourself, whether for sport or culture! 170 words

for your help!
Bleu demain toute la journée. Vert samedi!

Réponse : Let's Suggest/ 48 de magie8, postée le 28-10-2023 à 11:21:00 (S | E)
suggestion correction HELLO

Combine life as a mother with a professional career; many young women manage to do this successfully.
Of course, this requires organization and, when possible, the active participation of the partner who can help for a lot of things!
You can also give small tasks to your children.
We no longer live in the time of our grandmothers, and the use of numerous household appliances and robots of all kinds is a great time saver that can be devoted to personal or family leisure activities
Without making a habit of it, you also need to know how to ask for help when the load is too heavy. Why not ask the grandparents, who will often be happy to drive the children to the park or to various activities on Wednesdays?
It's also essential to maintain a balance between family and professional life, so that one doesn't take precedence over the other.
Finally, as a last piece of advice I'd say; try to set aside some time only for yourself, whether for sport or culture! 170 words

Hello ce texte est plus que correct , j ai encore passé du temps à tout analyser et controler je n ai rien trouvé de faux

Réponse : Let's Suggest/ 48 de here4u, postée le 28-10-2023 à 22:45:38 (S | E)
Hello dears!

Voici vos suggestions de corrections et ma petite collaboration complémentaire ! BRAVO à vous ! et de votre travail.

EXPRESSION N°1: initial text. (my preliminary indications are underlined)

Beeing mother ? Working outside ? I will say that it depend on the women’ partner. If they help and are organized to manage and educate the children together with the other partner, then it may be possible (not clear...). Of course, boys will say that the women have always educate children and that they must continue… but even for married couples, the things are not ever easy. The men are come back from work, they are tired (the women are not !) and they sit on the sofa or go to the garden , or to work on their moto, or even play on the computers or phones and wait. The woman do everything and is exhausted. The ados (overall girls) help a little, but the boys don’t … They have always something to do…
A woman can be a breadwinner, TB if she has no kid, or if she is a single mum, but in that condition, her life and her children’ life may be hell… Lack of money, and lack of time maybe terrible… 166 words

No indications!

EXPRESSION N°1: suggestions for corrections.

Beeing (x) mother ? Working outside ?I ('ll say that it(depend)on the( women' partner) r. If (they help) and(are organised) x to manage and educate the children together with the other partner, then it may be possible. Of course, boys will say that (the) women have always(educate) children and that they must) continue (x)… but even for married couples,(the) things are not (ever) easy. The men (are come back) from work, they are tired (the women are not !) and they sit on the sofa or go to the garden , or(to) work on their' moto) , or even play on the computers or phones and wait. The woman (do) everything and is exhausted The( ados) (overall ) ( girls) help a little, but the boys don’t … They have always something to do…
A woman can be a breadwinner, if she has no kid, or if she is a single mum, but in that condition, her life and her (children' life) may be hell… Lack of money, and lack of time (maybe) terrible… 166 words.

D'excellentes indications d'erreurs !

EXPRESSION N°1: suggestions:

Beeing a mother? Working outside? I'd say it depends on the woman's partner. If (he helps) and(organises himself) to manage and educate the children together with the other partner, then it may be possible. Of course, boys will say that women have always( brought up) children and that they should continue to do so()… but even for married couples, things are not (always) easy. The men ( come home ) from work, they are tired (the women are not !) and they sit on the sofa or go to the garden , or work on their motorbike) , or even play on the computers or phones and wait. The woman (does) everything and is exhausted The( teenagers,girls in general,)help a little, but the boys don’t … They have always something to do…
A woman can be a bread-winner, if she has no kid, or if she is a single mum, but in that condition, her life and ' that of her children ) may be hell… Lack of money, and lack of time (can be) terrible… 166 words

De bonnes suggestions! Bravo.

- Attention à la confusion 'be' et 'bee'. 'Be' donne 'being' [avec un seul -e]!
- (the) women's partners: revoir Lien internet

Si le possesseur est un nom qui a un pluriel irrégulier, il faut ajouter le -s à l'apostrophe: the women's cars.
N'oubliez pas non plus le "pluriel concret". Chaque femme a un partenaire, donc, en tout, il y en a beaucoup. Mettre le pluriel.
- the children: their children serait plus habituel.
- teenagers en général, boys girls - sans les articles !
- to be a breadwinner: rapporter de l'argent au foyer.
- bien faire la distinction entre 'maybe' et 'may be'. Lien internet

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EXPRESSION N°2: initial text. My preliminary indications are underlined.

Combine life as a mother with a professional career; many young women manage to do this successfully.
Of course, this requires organization and, when possible, the active participation of the partner who can help for a lot of things! Bien !
You can also give small tasks to your children.
We no longer live in the time of our grandmothers, and the use of numerous household appliances and robots of all kinds is a great time saver that can be devoted to personal or family leisure activities. TB
Without making a habit of it, you also need to know how to ask for help when the load is too heavy. Why not ask the grandparents, who will often be happy to drive the children to the park or to various activities on Wednesdays? (provided they live nearby!)
It's also essential to maintain a balance between family and professional life, so that one doesn't take precedence over the other.
Finally, as a last piece of advice I'd say; try to set aside some time only for yourself, whether for sport or culture! 170 words

Je m'interdis toujours de "regarder" les EXPRESSIONS avant de les poster. Celle-ci est TTB ! Bravo !

EXPRESSION N°2: suggestions

Combine life as a mother with a professional career; many young women manage to do this successfully.
Of course, this requires organization and, when possible, the active participation of the partner who can help for a lot of things!
You can also give small tasks to your children. expression un peu maladroite.
We no longer live in the time of our grandmothers, and the use of numerous household appliances and robots of all kinds is a great time saver that can be devoted to personal or family leisure activities.
Without making a habit of it, you also need to know how to ask for help when the load (of work)is too heavy. Why not ask TB the grandparents, who will often be happy to drive the children to the park or to various activities on Wednesdays?
It's also essential to maintain a balance between family and professional life, so that one doesn't take precedence over the other.(Not sure about that...)
Finally, as a last piece of advice I'd say; try to set aside some time only for yourself, whether for sport or culture! 170 words

- Une seule "vraie" faute: "combine" à l'infinitif sans to ne convient pas. Il s'agit "du fait de combiner": un nom !
- une tâche ménagère : a chore.
- Ne pas oublier les grands parents qui habitent loin de leurs petits... et/ ou qui sont encore en activité eux-mêmes !
- Du temps pour moi: some me-time

Je vous rappelle que vous pouvez - euh pardon, chacun peut - rédiger tout ou partie de ces EXPRESSIONS dans un FOLLOW UP WORK ! Merci aux participantes pour leur très bon travail de rédaction et de correction !

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Réponse : Let's Suggest/ 48 de amalia80, postée le 29-10-2023 à 12:25:33 (S | E)
EXPRESSION N°2: Follow up

Juggling her life as a mother with a professional career; many young women manage to do this successfully.
Of course, this requires organization and, when possible, the active participation of the partner who can help for a lot of things!
To give them a sense of responsability, you can also assign small chores to your children.
We no longer live in the time of our grandmothers, and the use of numerous household appliances and robots of all kinds is a great time saver that can be devoted to personal or family leisure activities.
Without making a habit of it, you also need to know how to ask for help when the load of work is too heavy. Why not ask the grandparents, who will often be happy to drive the children to the park or to various activities on Wednesdays?
It's also essential to maintain a balance between family and professional life, so that one doesn't take precedence over the other.(Not sure about that...)
Finally, as a last piece of advice I'd say; try to set aside some me time, whether for sport or culture! 170 words

Réponse : Let's Suggest/ 48 de here4u, postée le 30-10-2023 à 11:13:42 (S | E)
Hello dears,

Relecture : EXPRESSION N°2: Follow up

Juggling (very good idea!) her life as a mother with [Juggling motherhood and a career ]a professional career; : many young women manage to do this successfully.
Of course, this requires organization and, when possible, the active participation of the partner who can help for a lot of things!
To give them a sense of responsability, you can also assign small chores to your children.
We no longer live in the time of our grandmothers [We're no longer living in our grandmothers' time], and the use of numerous household appliances and robots of all kinds is a great time-saver that can be devoted to personal or family leisure activities. B
Without making a habit of it, you also need to know how to ask for help B when the load of work is too heavy. Why not ask the grandparents who will often be happy to drive/ take the children to the park or to various activities on Wednesdays?
It's also essential to maintain a balance TB between family and professional life, so that one doesn't take precedence over the other.(Not sure about that...)*
Finally, as a last piece of advice I'd say: try to set aside some me time [to keep/ save/ preserve some me-time], whether for sport or culture (or simply meeting friends, or even doing nothing!)! 170 words

* L'expression "take precedence over" m'a un peu gênée... par son côté franchement abrupt... Des parents font-ils consciemment cela sans imaginer une solution de "remplacement". Ceci m'est "impensable"... [mais c'est moi! ] Un adverbe ou une autre expression serait peut-être souhaitable pour adoucir le propos...
Un grand et ! C'est un TB Follow up!

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