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Message de zabou05 posté le 13-03-2013 à 20:26:31 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
J'ai une lettre de motivation à rendre pour la section OIB absolument demain. On m'a prévenuque hier seulement et je n'ai donc pas pu faire plus rapidement. C'est très urgent et important.
Pouvez-vous corriger mon texte s'il vous plait ? Le voici:
Mrs. / Mr.
I wish I would insert into the section OIB of the secondary school of ***. It’s a real wish for me since the 8th grade. In my college, I have already taken a section like her. It was really awesome! I had improved my English accent, vocabulary, grammar… And my culture: we had spoken about the history of England, the period of the immigration in the USA, the British and American school systems… We had read a book too: The Wave from Todd Strasser. In order to continue to improve my English, I will go to the USA during 10 days. I will be alone in my pen friend’s family. Thus I will learn some new things everyday!
That’s the reason why I’m so involved in this choice! English is very important, for any job, in everyday life. It’s an opportunity that I can’t let go. Furthermore, in the future, I would work in the medicine, and I know that English is very important in this job: the students already have English’ lessons; then, there are relationships with other countries where they only speak English; and if I would be doctor in the foreign, I should have a strong English. So I’m very interested in this section because language (speaking English fluently) is really important as English is one of the most spoken languages in the world. It’s really useful to have a good knowledge of the language in everyday life. Moreover, I love languages. That’s why I am applying. I have indeed always tried to study English as many hours as I could at English, and English was my first foreign language. I’m a dedicated pupil very keen on studying. I’m very ambitious as well. I love the school, study, participate, work (alone or in groups), literature, learn… Just my passion!
I wait impatiently your answer,
Sincerely yours,
Isabelle
Merci d'avance
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Edited by lucile83 on 13-03-2013 21:18
Message de zabou05 posté le 13-03-2013 à 20:26:31 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
J'ai une lettre de motivation à rendre pour la section OIB absolument demain. On m'a prévenu
Pouvez-vous corriger mon texte s'il vous plait ? Le voici:
Mrs. / Mr.
I wish I would insert into the section OIB of the secondary school of ***. It’s a real wish for me since the 8th grade. In my college, I have already taken a section like her. It was really awesome! I had improved my English accent, vocabulary, grammar… And my culture: we had spoken about the history of England, the period of the immigration in the USA, the British and American school systems… We had read a book too: The Wave from Todd Strasser. In order to continue to improve my English, I will go to the USA during 10 days. I will be alone in my pen friend’s family. Thus I will learn some new things everyday!
That’s the reason why I’m so involved in this choice! English is very important, for any job, in everyday life. It’s an opportunity that I can’t let go. Furthermore, in the future, I would work in the medicine, and I know that English is very important in this job: the students already have English’ lessons; then, there are relationships with other countries where they only speak English; and if I would be doctor in the foreign, I should have a strong English. So I’m very interested in this section because language (speaking English fluently) is really important as English is one of the most spoken languages in the world. It’s really useful to have a good knowledge of the language in everyday life. Moreover, I love languages. That’s why I am applying. I have indeed always tried to study English as many hours as I could at English, and English was my first foreign language. I’m a dedicated pupil very keen on studying. I’m very ambitious as well. I love the school, study, participate, work (alone or in groups), literature, learn… Just my passion!
I wait impatiently your answer,
Sincerely yours,
Isabelle
Merci d'avance
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Edited by lucile83 on 13-03-2013 21:18
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