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Message de antony05 posté le 05-04-2016 à 17:47:33 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
serait-il possible de me donner un avis sur ma production écrite sur les banlieues américaines et de m'apporter des éléments de correction ? Le sujet de ma rédaction est :
"Imagine the arguments given by the parents inflavour favour of suburbs in 150 words".
Mon travail :
Contrary to us, suburbs represent the residential areas in the outskirts of a city. Even if children or teenagers considerate the moving as a cruel decision, suburbs can be perceived as an awesome experience by parents.
First of all, most big cities are quite expensive for a bit of space contrary to suburbs which are affordable for more space.
Furthermore, public schools in the cities are knew to be overcrowded and underfunded. Public schools in suburbs can have better school opportunities for children.
Otherwise, parents want to move to suburbs to provide a healthier environment for children and to become eco-friendly because their acts are supposed to create a better life for children.
This plurality of arguments about the moving to suburbs has accentuated the suburbanization which is the growth of areas in the fringes of cities. If the urban sprawl goes on to increase, will a suburb stay a suburb or will it become a city ?
Merci d'avance pour vos réponses.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 05-04-2016 23:02
Message de antony05 posté le 05-04-2016 à 17:47:33 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
serait-il possible de me donner un avis sur ma production écrite sur les banlieues américaines et de m'apporter des éléments de correction ? Le sujet de ma rédaction est :
"Imagine the arguments given by the parents in
Mon travail :
Contrary to us, suburbs represent the residential areas in the outskirts of a city. Even if children or teenagers considerate the moving as a cruel decision, suburbs can be perceived as an awesome experience by parents.
First of all, most big cities are quite expensive for a bit of space contrary to suburbs which are affordable for more space.
Furthermore, public schools in the cities are knew to be overcrowded and underfunded. Public schools in suburbs can have better school opportunities for children.
Otherwise, parents want to move to suburbs to provide a healthier environment for children and to become eco-friendly because their acts are supposed to create a better life for children.
This plurality of arguments about the moving to suburbs has accentuated the suburbanization which is the growth of areas in the fringes of cities. If the urban sprawl goes on to increase, will a suburb stay a suburb or will it become a city ?
Merci d'avance pour vos réponses.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 05-04-2016 23:02
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