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Message de sarah971 posté le 09-10-2016 à 20:57:54 (S | E | F)
Bonsoir / bonjour !
Pourriez-vous m'apporter votre aide concernant la correction de mon texte s'il vous plaît ?
Je vous remercie d'avance !
In this document, Steve Jobs gives us the keys of success according to him.
First of all, he says that we have to be passionate to succeed in what we do. Reach the top is so tough that, without love and pleasure, reasonable people couldn't do it.
Furthermore, he adds that achievement requires a lot of work, considerable personal involvement and force us to live in constant worry. This represents the submerged part of the iceberg often ignored by people which only see success and fame.
To conclude, Steve Jobs thinks that as smart as we are, we need to surround ourselves by a very great team, to find solutions and to make the right decisions on time. Thus, according to the creator of Apple, teamwork helps us to meet our targets and build ourselves undeniably.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 09-10-2016 21:20
Message de sarah971 posté le 09-10-2016 à 20:57:54 (S | E | F)
Bonsoir / bonjour !
Pourriez-vous m'apporter votre aide concernant la correction de mon texte s'il vous plaît ?
Je vous remercie d'avance !
In this document, Steve Jobs gives us the keys of success according to him.
First of all, he says that we have to be passionate to succeed in what we do. Reach the top is so tough that, without love and pleasure, reasonable people couldn't do it.
Furthermore, he adds that achievement requires a lot of work, considerable personal involvement and force us to live in constant worry. This represents the submerged part of the iceberg often ignored by people which only see success and fame.
To conclude, Steve Jobs thinks that as smart as we are, we need to surround ourselves by a very great team, to find solutions and to make the right decisions on time. Thus, according to the creator of Apple, teamwork helps us to meet our targets and build ourselves undeniably.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 09-10-2016 21:20
Réponse : Correction/Steve Jobs de here4u, postée le 11-10-2016 à 13:36:25 (S | E)
Hello!
In this document, Steve Jobs gives us the keys of success according to him.
First of all, he says that we have to be passionate to succeed in what we do. Reach the top is so tough that, without love and pleasure, reasonable ??
people couldn't(temps?) do it.Furthermore, he adds that achievement requires a lot of work, considerable personal involvement and force us to live in constant worry. This represents the submerged (or "hidden") part of the iceberg often ignored by people which
only see success and fame.To conclude, Steve Jobs thinks that as smart as we are, we need to surround ourselves by a very great team, to find solutions and to make the right decisions on time. Thus, according to the creator of Apple, teamwork helps us to meet our targets and build ourselves undeniably.
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