Exposé/Object of the future
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Message de lucasb67 posté le 24-02-2017 à 20:36:25 (S | E | F)
Bonjour à tous,
j'ai pendant ces vacances scolaires un exposé sur un objet futuriste à réaliser. Je dois expliquer à quoi il sert, comment je le commercialise, quelle clientèle st ciblé, le mode de distribution... J'ai fini de le rédiger mais j'imagine qu'il est encore plein de fautes car j'ai un niveau vraiment très faible en anglais !
Merci de m'aider à le corriger !
Hello everyone. It haunts our imagination and is on our screens. You've surely seen it in Avatar or Terminator, but it will infiltrate our everyday life. What do you think I'm talking about? I'm talking about the exoskeletons. Making their autonomy to people with disabilities, reducing the pain in the workplace are ideas as old as the world. The exoskeleton is full of promises. We will talk about this technology that will shake our perception of the medical and professional sectors in the coming years.
But what exactly is an exoskeleton? Exoskeletons are mechanical structures that double the size of the human skeleton and give it physical abilities that it does not have.
What should we do with the worker who carries heavy tools or heavy loads 5 to 6 days a week? The one to whom the doctor has forbidden to carry more than 3kg? Who, after work, must give up physical activities ?
Social security figures around the world show expenditures of several billion euros in sick leave for medical treatments or surgical operations, linked to premature wear and tear of the human body, premature aging, pain and disorders Musculoskeletal (MSD) of workers. And employers manage as they can with the schedule of absences and work stoppages. The consequences of accidents at work are several million days lost every year.
In addition let me give you some complementary figures:
-1.5 billion euros per year: this is the cost of musculoskeletal disorders for social security.
-75% of recognized occupational diseases are associated with physical activities at work.
-80% of French people suffer from back problems.
- The back is the second reason for consultation in general medicine.
-In 2010, disorders of the upper limbs cost 20 million days lost.
- MSDs are the first reason for occupational disability before 45 years
I have a question for you. How many people in the working age had low back pain?
- 70% of people of working age were at least once suffering from low back pain.
- MSDs increase by 20% per year.
As our CEO Lucas B said, "We offer robots to help in the workplace. Our exoskeletons can help reduce the painful work. After having put on an exoskeleton adapted to his morphology and size, the employee will want to go to work, it will be a pleasure for him.
EXHAUS reduces physical limits, increases efficiency. EXHAUSS allows to use the powerful tool, even heavy, the best adapted, rather than to be content with a lighter but less effective.
It reduces work stoppages, making life easier for the employer.
By carrying the loads in place of the worker, EXHAUSS keeps him in good physical and psychological form until evening and makes him forget those difficult mornings of old when he dragged his feet on the road to work.
EXHAUSS makes it possible to envisage mobilizing a single worker to a position that would require two.
EXHAUS allows to reduce the physical capacities required, thus it makes it possible to open the accessibility of a station. Thanks to EXHAUSS, a wide range of workers, including those of lesser strength or older age, can gain access to positions previously physically unmanageable for them.
EXHAUS also makes it possible to reduce the difficulty, to reinforce the cohesion of the teams. A laborious job uses employees who regularly give up. Loaded the employer to recruit again, reform again, use again and start over. By reducing the difficulty, EXHAUSS allows to eliminate the constraints of management.
EXHAUS Reduces disability. Thanks to EXHAUSS, workers with prohibitions, limitations of exercise can find a job.
It can also fill in the lack of recognition, increase the attractiveness of a job. By making an unskilled worker a superman in armor to which the heads turn, EXHAUSS improves their motivation and mind.
The exoskeleton reduces pauses, improves performance and organizes teams. EXHAUSS makes it possible to reduce the number of breaks required and the rotation of successive workers at the same station.
EXHAUS will improve the life of all the building trades, handling, industry, precision crafts as well as many others ...
Now using 2 graphics I will give you some more arguments to show that our project will work.
The first chart shows the evolution of retirement age in France. We can see that between 2004 and 2012 the retirement age increased by 1 years and 4 months. He went from 58 years and 8 months to 60 years and 2 months. We can see more precisely that the retirement age increases by 2 or 3 months each year. This shows that we are working for longer and longer. But with age one has more physical problems, so one becomes less productive,
one is more often absent and ill. Our exoskeleton will allow this number of people ever more important to find a second youth. And this will enable the company to produce even more so in spite of the age of the employees who work. Companies have more need to shift loyal employees who are no longer efficient enough.
Our second graph shows the evolution of the number of people in each age group in the world population. The unit of the graph is in millions of people. We can see that in2050 there will be a lot more people on earth, but I think you know it.
But what you can see is that there will be many more seniors. For example the population over 80 will grow from 35 million people to about 140 million. So there will be more people who are not autonomous or reduced. We're going to have to deal with it and these people are going to cost a lot of money to families and the state. While with our exoskeleton during the many years they have worked, their bodies will not have suffered during these long years and these people will have far fewer health problems. And this tightened a gain for them but also for all. Companies will be able to continue hiring these people. And these people will stay healthy.
You may be wondering when our exoskeletons will be available on the market. We started the production in October 2016 because we had the objective of delivering the first orders 8 months later, so in June 2017. We want our customers to learn how to use the exoskeletons before the rush of the end-of-year celebrations because The pace is very sustained for industrialists. As for new orders, they can be enjoyed throughout the year. We take care to deliver within a period of 1 to 4 months depending of the quantity ordered and the modifications that must be made so that the exoskeletons meet as best as possible your expectations. Our flexibility and responsiveness enable us to adjust our production capacity.
But how to buy an exosqulette? We offer 2 different sales. Our first type of sale is a C to C sale. So we sell to companies. Leaders of companies who are concerned about their employees, production and anxious to make life easier for everyone will be able to buy our exoskeletons for their employees. The second type of sale is a sale B to C. That is to say that we sell by Internet to any person wishing to acquire one. It can be a child to play or more seriously for do-it-yourselfers, people who have to remake a house ...
Now enough talked about how our project is organized and what our exoskeleton will be used for. Now let's see what it looks like. It's called EXOS. It is a shortcut of the words exoskeleton. Here is this concentrate of technology. As I said before and as you can see it does not sound like an iron man with loads of gadgets not even useful or extravagant style. We created only what was really necessary for the worker.
We have developed an important know-how in the field of the machine and the control of a network of local subcontractors allows us to guarantee quality and delay for the parts.
We buy a maximum of industrial components from high-end suppliers to ensure lifespan.
Customer satisfaction is at the heart of our processes. We understand the complexity of each workstation with the desire to provide a reliable, cost-effective and user-friendly solution.
EXHAUS consists of a dynamic and multidisciplinary team that allows us to be constantly evolving to strengthen our skills and respond to the projects entrusted to us.
And now place to the logo. This logo was chosen because it represents the major stages in the evolution of man from the Stone Age to the present day.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 25-02-2017 09:00
Message de lucasb67 posté le 24-02-2017 à 20:36:25 (S | E | F)
Bonjour à tous,
j'ai pendant ces vacances scolaires un exposé sur un objet futuriste à réaliser. Je dois expliquer à quoi il sert, comment je le commercialise, quelle clientèle st ciblé, le mode de distribution... J'ai fini de le rédiger mais j'imagine qu'il est encore plein de fautes car j'ai un niveau vraiment très faible en anglais !
Merci de m'aider à le corriger !
Hello everyone. It haunts our imagination and is on our screens. You've surely seen it in Avatar or Terminator, but it will infiltrate our everyday life. What do you think I'm talking about? I'm talking about the exoskeletons. Making their autonomy to people with disabilities, reducing the pain in the workplace are ideas as old as the world. The exoskeleton is full of promises. We will talk about this technology that will shake our perception of the medical and professional sectors in the coming years.
But what exactly is an exoskeleton? Exoskeletons are mechanical structures that double the size of the human skeleton and give it physical abilities that it does not have.
What should we do with the worker who carries heavy tools or heavy loads 5 to 6 days a week? The one to whom the doctor has forbidden to carry more than 3kg? Who, after work, must give up physical activities ?
Social security figures around the world show expenditures of several billion euros in sick leave for medical treatments or surgical operations, linked to premature wear and tear of the human body, premature aging, pain and disorders Musculoskeletal (MSD) of workers. And employers manage as they can with the schedule of absences and work stoppages. The consequences of accidents at work are several million days lost every year.
In addition let me give you some complementary figures:
-1.5 billion euros per year: this is the cost of musculoskeletal disorders for social security.
-75% of recognized occupational diseases are associated with physical activities at work.
-80% of French people suffer from back problems.
- The back is the second reason for consultation in general medicine.
-In 2010, disorders of the upper limbs cost 20 million days lost.
- MSDs are the first reason for occupational disability before 45 years
I have a question for you. How many people in the working age had low back pain?
- 70% of people of working age were at least once suffering from low back pain.
- MSDs increase by 20% per year.
As our CEO Lucas B said, "We offer robots to help in the workplace. Our exoskeletons can help reduce the painful work. After having put on an exoskeleton adapted to his morphology and size, the employee will want to go to work, it will be a pleasure for him.
EXHAUS reduces physical limits, increases efficiency. EXHAUSS allows to use the powerful tool, even heavy, the best adapted, rather than to be content with a lighter but less effective.
It reduces work stoppages, making life easier for the employer.
By carrying the loads in place of the worker, EXHAUSS keeps him in good physical and psychological form until evening and makes him forget those difficult mornings of old when he dragged his feet on the road to work.
EXHAUSS makes it possible to envisage mobilizing a single worker to a position that would require two.
EXHAUS allows to reduce the physical capacities required, thus it makes it possible to open the accessibility of a station. Thanks to EXHAUSS, a wide range of workers, including those of lesser strength or older age, can gain access to positions previously physically unmanageable for them.
EXHAUS also makes it possible to reduce the difficulty, to reinforce the cohesion of the teams. A laborious job uses employees who regularly give up. Loaded the employer to recruit again, reform again, use again and start over. By reducing the difficulty, EXHAUSS allows to eliminate the constraints of management.
EXHAUS Reduces disability. Thanks to EXHAUSS, workers with prohibitions, limitations of exercise can find a job.
It can also fill in the lack of recognition, increase the attractiveness of a job. By making an unskilled worker a superman in armor to which the heads turn, EXHAUSS improves their motivation and mind.
The exoskeleton reduces pauses, improves performance and organizes teams. EXHAUSS makes it possible to reduce the number of breaks required and the rotation of successive workers at the same station.
EXHAUS will improve the life of all the building trades, handling, industry, precision crafts as well as many others ...
Now using 2 graphics I will give you some more arguments to show that our project will work.
The first chart shows the evolution of retirement age in France. We can see that between 2004 and 2012 the retirement age increased by 1 years and 4 months. He went from 58 years and 8 months to 60 years and 2 months. We can see more precisely that the retirement age increases by 2 or 3 months each year. This shows that we are working for longer and longer. But with age one has more physical problems, so one becomes less productive,
one is more often absent and ill. Our exoskeleton will allow this number of people ever more important to find a second youth. And this will enable the company to produce even more so in spite of the age of the employees who work. Companies have more need to shift loyal employees who are no longer efficient enough.
Our second graph shows the evolution of the number of people in each age group in the world population. The unit of the graph is in millions of people. We can see that in2050 there will be a lot more people on earth, but I think you know it.
But what you can see is that there will be many more seniors. For example the population over 80 will grow from 35 million people to about 140 million. So there will be more people who are not autonomous or reduced. We're going to have to deal with it and these people are going to cost a lot of money to families and the state. While with our exoskeleton during the many years they have worked, their bodies will not have suffered during these long years and these people will have far fewer health problems. And this tightened a gain for them but also for all. Companies will be able to continue hiring these people. And these people will stay healthy.
You may be wondering when our exoskeletons will be available on the market. We started the production in October 2016 because we had the objective of delivering the first orders 8 months later, so in June 2017. We want our customers to learn how to use the exoskeletons before the rush of the end-of-year celebrations because The pace is very sustained for industrialists. As for new orders, they can be enjoyed throughout the year. We take care to deliver within a period of 1 to 4 months depending of the quantity ordered and the modifications that must be made so that the exoskeletons meet as best as possible your expectations. Our flexibility and responsiveness enable us to adjust our production capacity.
But how to buy an exosqulette? We offer 2 different sales. Our first type of sale is a C to C sale. So we sell to companies. Leaders of companies who are concerned about their employees, production and anxious to make life easier for everyone will be able to buy our exoskeletons for their employees. The second type of sale is a sale B to C. That is to say that we sell by Internet to any person wishing to acquire one. It can be a child to play or more seriously for do-it-yourselfers, people who have to remake a house ...
Now enough talked about how our project is organized and what our exoskeleton will be used for. Now let's see what it looks like. It's called EXOS. It is a shortcut of the words exoskeleton. Here is this concentrate of technology. As I said before and as you can see it does not sound like an iron man with loads of gadgets not even useful or extravagant style. We created only what was really necessary for the worker.
We have developed an important know-how in the field of the machine and the control of a network of local subcontractors allows us to guarantee quality and delay for the parts.
We buy a maximum of industrial components from high-end suppliers to ensure lifespan.
Customer satisfaction is at the heart of our processes. We understand the complexity of each workstation with the desire to provide a reliable, cost-effective and user-friendly solution.
EXHAUS consists of a dynamic and multidisciplinary team that allows us to be constantly evolving to strengthen our skills and respond to the projects entrusted to us.
And now place to the logo. This logo was chosen because it represents the major stages in the evolution of man from the Stone Age to the present day.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 25-02-2017 09:00
Réponse : Exposé/Object of the future de lucile83, postée le 26-02-2017 à 15:31:42 (S | E)
anyone? 
Réponse : Exposé/Object of the future de here4u, postée le 26-02-2017 à 17:34:06 (S | E)
Hello !
I'll start ... but I won't have enough time to do the whole thing!
Hello everyone. It haunts our imagination and is on our screens. You've surely seen it in Avatar or Terminator, but it will infiltrate our everyday life. What do you think I'm talking about? I'm talking about the exoskeletons. Making= wrong verb their autonomy to people with disabilities, reducing the pain in the workplace are ideas which are as old as the world. The exoskeleton is full of promises. We will talk about this technology that will shake
our perception of the medical and professional sectors in the coming years.But what exactly is an exoskeleton? Exoskeletons are mechanical structures that double the size of the human skeleton and give it physical abilities that it does not have.
What should we do with the worker who carries heavy tools or heavy loads 5 to 6 days a week? The one to whom(cette forme est très écrite ... si c'est pour un exposé, en préférer une autre...) the doctor has forbidden to carry more than 3kg? Who, after work, must give up physical activities ?
Social security figures around the world show XXX expenditures of several billion euros in sick leave for medical treatments or surgical operations, linked to premature wear and tear of the human body, premature aging, pain and disorders Musculoskeletal (MSD) of workers = ordre des mots.
In addition let me give you some complementary figures:
-1.5 billion euros per year: this is the cost of musculoskeletal disorders for social security.
-75% of recognized occupational diseases are associated with physical activities at work.
-80% of French people suffer from back problems.
- The backache is the second reason for consultation in general medicine.
-In 2010, disorders of the upper limbs cost the loss of 20 million days (lost.)
- MSDs= STDs are the first reason for occupational disability before 45 years
I have a question for you. How many people in the working age had (temps?possible, mais il faut un marqueur de temps!) low back pain?
- 70% of people of working age were at least once suffering from low back pain. (when?whey use the -ing form?))
- MSDs increase by 20% per year.
Réponse : Exposé/Object of the future de phil512, postée le 26-02-2017 à 21:03:22 (S | E)
Bonjour,
Here we go again (for another part) !
EXHAUS or EXHAUSS?
As our CEO Lucas B said, "We offer robots to help in the workplace. Our exoskeletons can help reduce the painful work. After having put on an exoskeleton adapted to his morphology and size, the employee will want to (pourrait/devrait être beaucoup mieux dit : autre verbe, ou un adverbe, p.ex.) go to work, it will be a pleasure for him.
EXHAUS reduces physical limits,(les deux idées ne sont pas bien liées par cette virgule increases efficiency. EXHAUSS allows to use the powerful tool (lequel ? Il y en a plusieurs, des quantités !), even heavy XXX (il manque un petit mot pluriel ici, représentant le groupe d'outils), the best (superlatif inadéquat) adapted (manque ici aussi une référence au nombre), rather than to be content with a lighter but less effective (pluriel et toujours le même petit mot manquant).
It reduces work stoppages (déjà souligné par here4you, plutôt des interruptions, non ?), making life easier for the employer.
By carrying the loads in place of (plus simplement)the worker, EXHAUSS keeps him in good physical and psychological form (il y a mieux que "form")until XXX evening (il manque quelque chose ...ou alors plutôt "pendant toute la journée" ?)and makes him forget those difficult mornings of old when he dragged his feet on the road to work.
EXHAUSS makes it possible to envisage mobilizing (verbe assez inadéquat, il y a beaucoup mieux !) a single worker to a position that would require two.
EXHAUS allows to reduce the physical capacities required (position de l'adjectif), thus it makes it possible to open (verbe pas idéal) the accessibility of a XXX station (manque un mot). Thanks to EXHAUSS, a wide range of workers, including those of lesser strength or older age, can gain access to positions previously physically unmanageable for them.
EXHAUS also makes it possible to reduce the difficulty (laquelle ? vous l'évoquez plus loin), to reinforce the cohesion of the teams. A laborious job uses employees (autre verbe ou expression) who regularly give up. Loaded (??? remplacer par un sujet impersonnel et un verbe the employer to recruit again, reform again, use (autre verbe) again and start over. By reducing the difficulty, EXHAUSS allows to eliminate the (une partie de ?) constraints of management.
To be continued...😊
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